tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post5168405823253259976..comments2022-11-08T10:33:46.069-05:00Comments on Mommy is a Power Ranger: Memoir PitchAlisonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18371233258950468974noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-66239787076152318502012-02-16T01:42:44.535-05:002012-02-16T01:42:44.535-05:00Great job. This kept me glued. Please stop by my s...Great job. This kept me glued. Please stop by my stoop as I have something there for you.Laura Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04484480915813337237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-86023693084526471552012-02-14T20:48:09.407-05:002012-02-14T20:48:09.407-05:00I like Barbara's concrit, too. There's so...I like Barbara's concrit, too. There's so much to your story, and I love the happy ending. Still, there's so much more time left, and I like the idea of keeping it open to the next chapter (pun intended) of your life :)angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-84324655183747156472012-02-14T17:26:34.384-05:002012-02-14T17:26:34.384-05:00I'm intrigued. Are you working on this now?I'm intrigued. Are you working on this now?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-2916419372835199712012-02-14T14:40:28.139-05:002012-02-14T14:40:28.139-05:00I like Barbara's concrit. I am glad this has ...I like Barbara's concrit. I am glad this has a happy ending.Alyssa Dyksterhousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03580975283346133744noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-84147000002878530292012-02-14T13:26:07.848-05:002012-02-14T13:26:07.848-05:00Oh, I love it! It would absolutely be a compelling...Oh, I love it! It would absolutely be a compelling read!<br /><br />In terms on concrit, I think you should always leave your reader wanting more... so perhaps ending it as:<br /><br />"He is everything she thought she wanted, but the fairytale doesn't last long. She gets drawn into a dark underworld of abuse, drug addiction, and lies, where, in desperation, she sinks to unfathomable lows. <br /><br />Will an unexpected pregnancy be the glue that holds her together or the last straw that topples everything?"<br /><br />[Please excuse my tired metaphors!!]<br /><br />- Barbara, @ derebus, via Write on Edge<br />www(dot)derebus(dot)net/home/?p=386Barbarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05481035784237871634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3640496057427000320.post-4297948033081029112012-02-14T13:08:39.191-05:002012-02-14T13:08:39.191-05:00It sounds very powerful- a real emotional roller-c...It sounds very powerful- a real emotional roller-coaster to read. I'm so glad it has a happy ending :)~Juliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15630711945679604201noreply@blogger.com