Tuesday, October 4, 2011

Why I'm Happy Summer is Over

The sun viciously beats down.  Tar bubbles; heat steams up off the pavement.

Sweat beads on my face, constantly dripping.

My face is so flushed I look like a cooked lobster.

Livid bruises in all shades of red, purple, green, and yellow cover my arms and legs.

I feel like I'm trying to breathe underwater-the air is thick with humidity.

My hands tremble, getting tingly and numb as the seconds progress.

Multicolored dots cloud my vision, increasing until my world is black.

I am falling.  My ears roar with the sound of crashing waves. 

This post was written in response tothis week's RemembeRED prompt from Write on Edge.
Writing short posts is an excellent way to flex your word choice muscles. Which word is the most clear? Poignant? Direct?  This week I want you to conjure something. An object, a person, a feeling, a color, a season- whatever you like. But don’t tell me what it is, conjure it.
You have 100 words, use them wisely. And yes- you so can do this!

Here's a little background info on this post.  I have a bleeding disorder called vonWillebrand's disease.  My blood doesn't clot right, and it really affects me in the summer.  I am usually okay when the weather is cooler, though.  I really can't even go out in summer because I faint constantly.  So I sit in the air conditioning whenever it's hot.  And I pretty  much hate summer, because I've had a lot of bad experiences where people did nothing when I fainted.  I will always remember fainting in the doorway to an ice cream store (literally half inside the store, half outside) and no one even asked me if I was okay.  All I needed was one person to be nice and see if I needed anything (I really needed some cold water) but no one did and I couldn't even sit up for a half hour.  People just stared at me and walked over me to get in and out of the store.  It was awful.


  1. Oh wow. I'm so sorry!! The background ... wow, that's AWFUL that that happened to you!! WTF is wrong with some people?

  2. Poetic.

    I'd like to say I am shocked that no one helped you...but people are mostly unaware of life beyond their nose....

  3. great description of an awful time being had... and I agree with WTF is wrong with people? we have serious lost the whole concept of neighbor/friend/helper/good samaritan...

  4. I don't share your condition, but I absolutely know that feeling where it hurts to breathe because of the humidity.

    Very, very powerful words. Before the description, though, I had a very hard time figuring out what you were trying to convey.

  5. I'm not fond of summer's heat and humidity either. But nothing like you have to deal with. And I'm shocked that no one was human enough to see what was wrong.

  6. Thank you for explaining your condition. How awful that anyone would do that to another person!

    I love the summer, and I'm so sorry that you aren't able to enjoy it. You really did a good job of showing how miserable it is for you.

  7. oh my goodness, how awful, how can people be so cruel?

    with my fibromyalgia Summer is actually better for me, the rawness of winter "hurts" more..so I understand your dislike for a season.

    this was written so well...with such description..I really liked it.

  8. Oh, that's just awful. I don't blame you for just wanting to stay inside and out of the heat :(

  9. That's horrible! My niece has some sort of cloting disorder and she looks like she has bruises all the time, but I don't remember the name of it!
    It's no wonder you don't live in Alaska! And so for you, I am happy summer is at an end!

  10. Oh my, so sorry to hear that, Alison. Summer's always been my favorite season, never thought how it could be hell for some people. So, so very sorry. It's a good thing then that summer's over! Take care xoxo.

  11. Thank you all for the comments. I can't wrap my head around why people don't help others. I would never do that to other people. There have been a few times where people have offered to help me, but many more times no one did. I just wanted to get my experience out there so that maybe someone would think twice and maybe be nicer to people in the future. I've had people just assume nasty things like I overdosed on drugs or something when I've fainted. Thanks again for the supportive comments!