Alone.
Afraid.
Violated.
Groggy.
Disoriented.
I walk through the snow in only boots and a jacket.
I see my friend.
Collapsing into him, I sob.
This was written in response to this week's Red Writing Hood Prompt.
Let’s lighten it up around here. And when I say lighten, I mean REALLY lighten.
This week’s assignment will require the fewest number of words ever: we want you to write a story – your choice of topic – as a tweet.
Wow. This is powerful. It lingers. I hope the girl finds hope and justice.
ReplyDeletereally powerful and emotionally evocative in such a brief post! great prompt response!
ReplyDeleteOh. Chilling, heartbreaking, genius.
ReplyDeleteI got cold just reading the line about walking in the snow. Like Galit said, so chilling, in more ways than one. Wow.
ReplyDeleteThis is a haunting tale with such powerful images. Amazingly done in so few of words.
ReplyDeleteVisiting and following from WOE. I can tell I'm going to like you from your "about me" description alone!
Oh, I love this one! I really wanted to know more!
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to read the book!
ReplyDeleteCold, lost, and violated...this is a bad night.
ReplyDeleteOh! How sad! You said so much without really saying anything at all. Leaves us guessing! I love it!
ReplyDeleteSo many images come to mind. Makes me want to know more. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSome powerful images here. I liked it. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThank goodness she found someone that can help!
ReplyDeleteGosh. I don't even know what to say. I guess that means you did a great job - this literally leaves me searching for words to convey my emotions. Great job.
ReplyDeletePowerful. Sorrowful.
ReplyDeleteThose are the words that hit me when I finished reading.
Oh no. I feel for this poor girl..
ReplyDeleteThis is the perfect into to an extraordinary story.
ReplyDeleteThank you all for the wonderful comments. I really appreciate your feedback!
ReplyDeleteoooooooooh... this one made me angry. grrrrrrr to whoever the bad guy is!! RAWR!!!
ReplyDeleteSadness. Anger. Release. What powerful things to bring out in such few words.
ReplyDeletePowerful. Sad. I reread it several times. It has such an impact.
ReplyDeleteWow, this was heartbreaking and alarming.
ReplyDeleteWow, intense. I, too, wrote about a girl under-dressed in the snow. But this had a definite flavor of violence to it. Disturbing but solid work.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely intense, in such a small amount of words so much is conveyed. great job!
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